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| Subject: | | Corrected blog |
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Z.Z.
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Tue, Aug 21 2007, 11:47pm
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Hi Wisker :)
Your dads proof is pretty good.
There are a few more corrections that I found:
"We live in a world that is constantly changing, just like our clothing. Seas vanish and deserts appear, mountains grow and plants and animals adapt to survive. Just like we adapt to our environment, so do the other occupants of our planet. Life forms evolve through mutations and exchange of genetic material.
Mankind has adapted to survive in this world in polar, temperate or tropic conditions. Many ideas have evolved as to the evolution of life forms, some make sense and some do not, but nonetheless these are beliefs that have given hope to many and a thought of knowledge to some. Of these beliefs there are two main ones, Evolution and Creationism.
Many creationists say that if man evolved from apes, why are there still apes?
The answer to this question is quite easy. If apes evolved into mankind, or earlier forms of man, it was because of mutations and exchange of genetic material that caused them to adapt to survive. While this happened, not all of the apes mutated, only a select few of their population mutated, leaving some that were the way they were originally. This allowed a new species, which could have been early man, to adapt to survive.
The same applies to dinosaurs evolving into birds. Not all the dinosaurs would have evolved into birds, some would have remained the same, which leads to why these may have become extinct, maybe their unchanged forms could not adapt to the changes in the environment. It also means there could possibly be a few remnants of them left alive today, but this is highly unlikely.
The same could be for Bigfoot. Perhaps it is a mutated or evolved form of man or ape that is struggling to adapt to a changing world, leaving its numbers few, and causing it not to be spotted very often."
1. Removed paragraph break between "we" and "adapt" to continue complete sentence.
2. Added comma after the word "environment" in first paragraph to separate parts of compound sentence.
3. Added comma after the word "forms" in second paragraph to separate parts of compound sentence.
3 1/2. Added comma after the word "ones", removed comma after the word "Evolution".
4. Changed the word "it" in third paragraph to "if" to clarify statement.
5. Changed period after the word "apes" to a comma to continue sentence.
6. Decapitalized the word "why" to continue compound sentence.
7. Removed "to answer" as being redundant in same sentence.
8. Added commas after the words "mankind" and "man" to separate ideas within the compound sentence.
9. Added comma after the word "mutated", and added the word "mutated" to make the sentence understandable.
10. Changed "Causing" to "This allowed", and added a comma after the word "man" to make sentence more understandable.
11. Added comma after the words "birds", "same", and "extinct" to separate ideas within the compound sentence.
12. Removed extraneous period after the word "unlikely" to end sentence.
13. Added comma after the word "world".
14. Changed period after the word "few" to a comma, added the word "and", and decapitalized the word "causing" to complete the sentence. |
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| Subject: | | Re: Corrected blog |
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wisker
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Wed, Aug 22 2007, 8:08am
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thanks i added your corrected version to the blog |
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